Your submission is commended for its graphic cohesiveness and also, how specific your brief is already (you have a site, and a material) – well done. More important than the geology, for you, is to start understanding the “archaeology” of the clothes. What are the different materials in the clothes? How do they degrade differently in the sun? How do they behave differently? Where do they come from? This material palette is much more worth exploring than the geology in a conventional sense – how do you illustrate this palette of materials in a way that might be reminiscent of geological imagery but is depicting a completely different dataset? How do you sift through the discarded clothes to identify them? Surely cotton degrades differently than polyester. Can you estimate numbers? What are people more likely to discard? How can you re-use each of the different types of fabric? How might they experience discoloration in the sun?
The second poster contains the beginnings of an interesting exploration. However, if you were to laser-focus on one thing, what would it be? I would say it would be the existing material intelligence, how people are already using the materials they have at hand – in what way do they already know how to work with these materials. Perhaps this could be explored in detailed sections or a large axonometric.
Do bear in mind that the poster can work better as a “unity” (imagine as if this is for a competition submission) – rather than a series of tiles in a large piece of paper (which is more or less your current format). This means that you have to be VERY SELECTIVE about the work that goes on the poster, but doesn’t mean that you cannot research the area and geography in depth. The materials that don’t “make it” into the poster can be kept in a folder on your computer.
As you know, some students will come to present their work, so that you can get a better idea on how to work and improve your course output. Until March, we won’t be having 1-1 tutorials, so this feedback is very important to take onboard until then. If you have further questions about this feedback, please do not hesitate to get back in touch. P
Your submission is commended for its graphic cohesiveness and also, how specific your brief is already (you have a site, and a material) – well done. More important than the geology, for you, is to start understanding the “archaeology” of the clothes. What are the different materials in the clothes? How do they degrade differently in the sun? How do they behave differently? Where do they come from? This material palette is much more worth exploring than the geology in a conventional sense – how do you illustrate this palette of materials in a way that might be reminiscent of geological imagery but is depicting a completely different dataset? How do you sift through the discarded clothes to identify them? Surely cotton degrades differently than polyester. Can you estimate numbers? What are people more likely to discard? How can you re-use each of the different types of fabric? How might they experience discoloration in the sun?
The second poster contains the beginnings of an interesting exploration. However, if you were to laser-focus on one thing, what would it be? I would say it would be the existing material intelligence, how people are already using the materials they have at hand – in what way do they already know how to work with these materials. Perhaps this could be explored in detailed sections or a large axonometric.
Do bear in mind that the poster can work better as a “unity” (imagine as if this is for a competition submission) – rather than a series of tiles in a large piece of paper (which is more or less your current format). This means that you have to be VERY SELECTIVE about the work that goes on the poster, but doesn’t mean that you cannot research the area and geography in depth. The materials that don’t “make it” into the poster can be kept in a folder on your computer.
As you know, some students will come to present their work, so that you can get a better idea on how to work and improve your course output. Until March, we won’t be having 1-1 tutorials, so this feedback is very important to take onboard until then. If you have further questions about this feedback, please do not hesitate to get back in touch. P